Posted by: steveonfilm | September 2, 2008

Back in Action

Summer is “officially” over. My little vacations was very refreshing. And as I said, I needed it. It’s been a rough two weeks, and sometimes you just need to take a step back for a few days.

But that’s all over and behind me now, and it’s time to hit the ground running once again.

Now I’m back staring at page 98 of 103 of my sixth draft of Bystander. It’s time for the big finish. The last major action sequence (the ambush at the airstrip) of the script is done. But I’m not certain how to get through the last two big beats of the script.

I think the hard part is that I know how the final few scenes will play out. I can see it in my head. I’ve even been over the dialogue. It’s connecting the two points that I’m having trouble with.

I’ve got what happens at the end of the airstrip scene. I’ve got what happens at the end of the movie. But getting from one to the next is a challenge, and I think it boils down to one thing…how do I explain the twist.

There is a big twist with Martin’s character at the end of the airstrip sequence. This isn’t something new. It was already present in draft 5. However, how the twist plays out is different since a removed an entire character in this draft that helps explain it. Without that character, I’m without the explanation. So now I’m forced with Kyle summing things up for Duane.

I’ve tried the dialogue a few times, but it turns into a question and answer session, which isn’t good. To me, nothing is more boring to read than a question and answer session in a script. I used to do it all the time and I didn’t even realize it. But now that I recognize it in my own writing, and try to avoid it at all costs. But yet, the scene keeps coming back to that.

This leads me to two questions. One, does this mean that I should drop the twist? Two, have I over complicated things again? This wouldn’t be the first time I’ve made things more difficult than I needed to for the sake of “the story.” But I’m not sure that’s the case here. I already had the twist in a previous draft. It makes sense. I don’t see a reason to remove it. Of course, that could be the problem, I’m just not seeing it.

Then again the way the twist plays out this time is different. There was an entire beat between the twist and the airstrip sequence previously. Now it happens at the tail end of the airstrip sequence. Maybe that’s the problem.

You know what? I got it….

It just hit me…

I’ve got to get to writing now before I lose it….



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