Posted by: steveonfilm | September 16, 2009

Served Cold Challenge: Day Twenty Five

There’s not a whole lot I can write about tonight. I marked up about 20 pages of stuff.

One thing I noticed was that I never mentioned, or implied, Fisher’s military training. He was an Army Ranger, which is where his repelling and weapons training comes from. I never mentioned this in the screenplay, and I’m not sure how I missed it since it was a pretty important part of his back story when I was creating his character.

Anyway, I’ve implied it with a shot of a Ranger tattoo on his shoulder on page 3. I’m not sure if it will make it’s way into dialog or not, but I’ll see how things progress.

That’s about it for now.

Until next time, keep writing!
-Steve

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  1. I’m just now checking out your blog so I’m not too familiar with your story here, but I thought I throw out some suggestions: Have a close friend, maybe haven’t seen him in awhile open with a “Hey, Ranger!” or a “I haven’t seen you since Ranger school.” This friend could also be a quick meeting with a former CO. Hell, in this day and age, an email announcing some kind of military reunion of some sort could work. Of course, there’s always the dreaded training/mission flashback. We’re always taught not to use them in screenplays, but you go to a movie and “lo and behold”, there they are!

    I thought I was the only one who used “Keep Writing” to close a blog. KW!

  2. Some good suggestions there.

    I wanted to go with something subtle. Just enough to allow the audience to suspend disbelief when Fisher does a few things you just can’t do without formal training.

    I settled on simply showing ranger tattoo on his shoulder thats visible during a shower that happens early on page 3. And then there is a reference to picking up a lot of things “when you’re stuck in the mountains of Afghanistan for months at a time,” that occurs about half way through the first act.

    Hopefully that’s enough. And hell, most quasi drama/action movies don’t even do THAT much to explain how some of the characters know how to do what they do. I just thought in this case it rounds out Fisher’s character a bit more.

    Yeah, I just started using the “Keep writing” thing a few months back. Seems to fit better than anything else I could come up with.
    What types of things

    What types of things do you like to write?


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