I finished up my first draft an hour or so ago. I’m actually VERY pleased with how it turned out. I’m just over 5 pages right now, but I don’t see it being an issue to get it down to five or likely closer to four. There’s LOTS I want to cut.
My subtext is a little weak, mainly because at this point I wanted to capture the gist of the conversation and emotions at stake. But reworking my dialog to be less on the nose will get easier as I start to chip away at some of the busyness.
It’s definitely not a “happy” story, to say the least.