Well, I did MUCH worse than last year (low 80s as opposed to mid 90s). I can’t say I disagree with the feedback. I took more of a chance with my entry this year, and I never felt like I nailed it as much as I’d hoped.
Here’s what teh judge had to say:
“Good visuals here, some sharp action. Enjoyed the interplay between the characters, though the setup feels a little familiar (a lot of zombie stuff these days) and the writing style is a little dense. A leaner style resonates more and fits with the current Hollywood paradigm. Dialogue had some good beats but could have used a more subtextual approach. Still, some good moments here and kudos for writing visually.”
It’s 5 pages of an idea that I had to come up with over 3 days. I think that accounts for a lot of the denseness. But otherwise, I’m not too hung up on it. The judge brings up valid points, and again I think a lot of my misses are because I was writing something out of my element. But if I took one thing away from this little contest is that my subtext in dialog needs work.
Until next time, keep writing.